The two main weaknesses in the stories submitted for the Book of Mormon contest were too much telling and info dumps.
This week let’s focus on showing vs telling. (Next Friday, we’ll deal with info dumps.)
- Go read this short tutorial on Showing vs Telling.
- Rewrite the four sentences at the end of the tutorial and post one of them in the comments section.
- Find a paragraph in your current WIP. Rewrite it using what you’ve learned.
If you need more practice, continue to go through your WIP to find telling sentences and add specific sensory detail.
One note: Not every single sentence in your story or book has to be jam-packed with sensory detail. That would be hard to read and extremely annoying. However, as a general rule, the more you show, the better.